In homeschool we are talking about making the reader feel like they are in the place you are describing.  I find this very fun to do.  I will try to take you to a place in Breckinridge, Colorado called the "Day Frame".  Walk in the front door and sit on the orange couch.  M-M-M-M smell the sweet aroma of beignets and snow ice cream.  The small A-shaped hut is heated by a wood burning furnace.  You sit in front of it warm and toasty while its -20 degrees out and three feet of snow.  You look forward to the skiing days to come and if there will be more snow the next day.  Blip, Blip you drop the small marshmallow in your hot cocoa and then sip.  Tssssss, the creamy liquid chocolate bites your tongue.  Now the furnace is even hotter and the snow is now 3 1/2 feet deep.  You feel the sudden urge to jump in it.  You instantly slip more clothes on and run out the door.  Right off, the freezing air nips your nose and cheeks.  You decisively open the door and sprint back into the warm A frame.

Did it work?  Were you teleported to the A frame?